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Buckeye Jones

Review Haiku

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I see that the Top 100 blurbs are down to the final ten. I wrote four. While it was a lot of fun, it was also a lot of work. I bet Greg & co. would have made a lot quicker progress if they'd just asked for haiku blurbs.

For example, the blurb for M was really hard to write. But this haiku took thirty seconds.

M

1931, Fritz Lang

Violent men search

Pedophile Pete Lorre

Whose big speech fails him.

So, now its your turn. Post your haiku reviews here. Whatever film you want. Heck, even Sunshine. Three lines. Seventeen syllables. Let 'em rip.

Edited by Buckeye Jones

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Jaws: The Revenge

1987, Joseph Sargent

Shark has G P S

To locate Chief Brody's wife

In the Bahamas

Edited by Baal_T'shuvah

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Nice one, Baal. There's so much possibility with these!

You Can Count on Me

2000, Ken Lonergan

Brother is a dope

But nephew loves his style

Sister sure doesn’t.

Edited by Buckeye Jones

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The Incredibles

Heroes aren't wanted

An old fan shakes all you love

You should have been kind.

Sophie Scholl - The Final Days

Lie boldly, sweet girl

And speak truth more bravely still

See, the sun still shines.

District 9

No more us and them

You can't go home, but he can

You see through new eyes.

Edited by SDG

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Toy Story

My childhood toys

Move, talk and fight psycho Sid

Who scares my own kids.

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Buckeye Jones wrote:

: My childhood toys

There should be an extra syllable there, no?

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: My childhood toys

There should be an extra syllable there, no?

Technically "child" is one syllable, but in practice it's so close to two syllables (something like "chi-uld") that I think this is barely a cheat.

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chi-ld. I even did the trick where you put your hand under your chin while saying the word to count the syllables. (you may have to say it with a southern accent to get it work.)

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Toy Story 2

It was a great show

Tokyo calls, you don't hear Buzz

Not your finest hour.

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SDG wrote:

: Technically "child" is one syllable, but in practice it's so close to two syllables (something like "chi-uld") that I think this is barely a cheat.

Perhaps, but the word in question is "childhood", not "child". And "childhood" is often pronounced "chile-hood" or even "chile-dood". I don't think anyone stretches it out to three syllables by pronouncing it "chi-uld-hood", do they?

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: Technically "child" is one syllable, but in practice it's so close to two syllables (something like "chi-uld") that I think this is barely a cheat.

Perhaps, but the word in question is "childhood", not "child". And "childhood" is often pronounced "chile-hood" or even "chile-dood". I don't think anyone stretches it out to three syllables by pronouncing it "chi-uld-hood", do they?

They do. (FWIW, I've never heard anything even approximating "chile-dood.")

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Andrei Rublev

You watch the world burn

Pride, lust, wrath; you cannot speak

You will paint again.

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SDG wrote:

: They do.

Who ARE these people!?

: (FWIW, I've never heard anything even approximating "chile-dood.")

Well, maybe if you insert an "h" between the "d" and the first "o". I dunno. I keep saying the word to myself right now to see how it sounds, and I'm afraid I've begun to overthink this to the point where anything and everything seems possible.

Suffice it to say, though, that when poets play around with pronunciation, they generally add punctuation to clarify their intentions, yes? (E.g., writing "ev'ning" instead of "evening". Though I guess none of them ever write "Wen'sday" instead of "Wednesday". Oh bother.)

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SDG wrote:

: They do.

Who ARE these people!?

: (FWIW, I've never heard anything even approximating "chile-dood.")

Well, maybe if you insert an "h" between the "d" and the first "o". I dunno. I keep saying the word to myself right now to see how it sounds, and I'm afraid I've begun to overthink this to the point where anything and everything seems possible.

Suffice it to say, though, that when poets play around with pronunciation, they generally add punctuation to clarify their intentions, yes? (E.g., writing "ev'ning" instead of "evening". Though I guess none of them ever write "Wen'sday" instead of "Wednesday". Oh bother.)

I've heard "chill dood." But that might just be an Ohio variant.

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Stalker

What is this green place

That makes time crawl to a halt?

Did that glass just move?

Adventureland

I think I liked it

Because I am certainly

A games (not rides) guy.

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Secret of Kells

I'm told that this book

Can turn darkness into light.

But I missed that bit.

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I dunno. I keep saying the word to myself right now to see how it sounds, and I'm afraid I've begun to overthink this to the point where anything and everything seems possible.

Suffice it to say, though, that when poets play around with pronunciation, they generally add punctuation to clarify their intentions, yes? (E.g., writing "ev'ning" instead of "evening". Though I guess none of them ever write "Wen'sday" instead of "Wednesday". Oh bother.)

That space, where anything and everything seems possible? Yeah, that's Ed's Haiku Land. Welcome. Please don't litter.

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There Will Be Blood

He is an oil man.

His mute son tells him the truth.

He drinks your milkshake.

Wings of Desire

Angels want so say

"Ah!" and drink coffee on the

trapeze in color.

The Fisher King

The Red Knight chases

Jeff Bridges toward redemption.

Parry would be proud.

Edited by tyler1984

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I like this. OK, I've never done Haiku, in fact I thought it was a form of Karate before now. Jokin'!

If it's 5X7X5, do all the lines need to be self-contained or can it simply be broken up into a run-on sentence?

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There Will Be Blood

Oh sure, pick a movie with two five-syllable catchphrases. :lol:

If it's 5X7X5, do all the lines need to be self-contained or can it simply be broken up into a run-on sentence?

Sentences can break across lines or it can all be one run-on, but somehow or other the line breaks ought to "work."

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No Country for Old Men

Guy with the haircut

Is the new Terminator.

Who will save us now?

Edited by Cunningham

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The Dark Knight

Joker wreaks havoc

On Gothams' White and Dark Knights.

Only one endures.

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Citizen Kane

Xanadu is dark

He had it all, then lost it

Rosebud is no more.

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Au Hasard Balthazar

Led from girl to man

Quiet brayer bears the blows

Of humanity

Munyurangabo

Interstitial breath

Still full of pain and regret

And hope in the mud

Summer Hours

When family fades

You gather the remainders

Decide what to keep

Edited by KShaw

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Very nice, all three, KShaw. (I was contemplating a Summer Hours one myself ...)

Hey! Let's play a new game! Review haikus ... without titles!

(Peter, the first one's for you ... syllable wise, that is. :) )

They awakened us

Called from the moon and beyond

Childhood starts anew.

She watched from the tree

Now the moon reaches for her

Who will miss the boat?

(Yes, those ones are easy ... they'll get harder, I'm sure.)

Edited by SDG

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