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I doubt it's these (because they're TV shows) but you have me thinking of (vague potential spoilers) both Battlestar Galactica and Babylon 5, at least as far as an important "She" coming back unexpectedly (though there isn't much of a God connection in Babylon's case).

Haven't seen this either, but how about Event Horizon? (EDIT: Ah Baal you just beat me on that! :) )

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The silence of space

Is rent by a derelict.

God knows where she's been.

Event Horizon?

ding!ding!ding!

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I posted this back a ways, but I think it got missed. Should be a fairly easy one.

Kin of crooked men,

but his conscience gives no peace.

Neither will his priest.

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I posted this back a ways, but I think it got missed. Should be a fairly easy one.

Kin of crooked men,

but his conscience gives no peace.

Neither will his priest.

I saw that one and the first guess that came to my mind was A History of Violence, but I don't remember a priest in that one....

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Please forgive me if these films have been reviewed previously, but here are a few:

Snowy branches

Frigid water on cynical skin

Man sighs - daybreak

Slaughtered like cattle

Their number increases

Fire bearer's son despairs

Oh horror -

Women stampeded, prairie flatus

Limousine sunset

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Please forgive me if these films have been reviewed previously, but here are a few:

Slaughtered like cattle

Their number increases

Fire bearer's son despairs

I like it. No Country for Old Men

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I posted this back a ways, but I think it got missed. Should be a fairly easy one.

Kin of crooked men,

but his conscience gives no peace.

Neither will his priest.

I saw that one and the first guess that came to my mind was A History of Violence, but I don't remember a priest in that one....

Ah I didn't think of that. But no, not that one.

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Please forgive me if these films have been reviewed previously, but here are a few:

Slaughtered like cattle

Their number increases

Fire bearer's son despairs

I like it. No Country for Old Men

Bingo! And thanks!

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I couldn't resist one more:

Funny wealthy man

Undead or not undead?

Rifle blast! Big mistake.

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Not to play syllable cop or anything, but none of these ...

: Snowy branches (4)

: Frigid water on cynical skin (9)

: Man sighs - daybreak (4)

: Slaughtered like cattle (5)

: Their number increases (6)

: Fire bearer's son despairs (6)

: Oh horror - (3)

: Women stampeded, prairie flatus (9)

: Limousine sunset (5)

: Funny wealthy man (5)

: Undead or not undead? (6)

: Rifle blast! Big mistake. (6)

... follow the 5-7-5 formula of a haiku. Although if you move the line breaks around, you'd still get 17 syllables total.

Then again, hmmm, Wikipedia informs me that my understanding of haiku may be very, very, very limited. It seems my grade-school teachers didn't tell me the whole story. So, hmmm, there may be more freedom in coming up with these here than I thought.

Edited by Peter T Chattaway

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I couldn't resist one more:

Funny wealthy man

Undead or not undead?

Rifle blast! Big mistake.

HA! If this is Zombieland, it's awesome!

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Kin of crooked men,

but his conscience gives no peace.

Neither will his priest.

Well I was going to say I Confess because of the last 2 lines, but I do not remember the murderer being a "Kin of crooked men."

Edited by Benchwarmer

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Kin of crooked men,

but his conscience gives no peace.

Neither will his priest.

Well I was going to say I Confess because of the last 2 lines, but I do not remember the murderer being a "Kin of crooked men."

Nope, but you're in the right era.

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Kin of crooked men,

but his conscience gives no peace.

Neither will his priest.

Hang on, I think I got it: On the Waterfront

That's the one!

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Thanks, BMW - you got it!

And Peter, I'm no haiku expert either, but from my limited reading, the 'English rules' are more flexible than 5-7-5, as the original rules are kind of untranslateable from the Japanese. And thus endeth my poetry knowledge. So I figured I'd just have fun and follow the more flexible guidelines.

Edited by Andrew

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The writer’s a hack;

The hoodlum sure isn’t,

but blood wins the white way.

This one's still active. As a hint, it was inspired by the posts around "The Purple Rose of Cairo".

Edited by Buckeye Jones

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From a friend:

Christmas is canceled.

But Santa still brings great joy

To far off children.

FWIW, I got it right away.

Santa Claus Conquers the Martians?

The writer’s a hack;

The hoodlum sure isn’t,

but blood wins the white way.

This one's still active. As a hint, it was inspired by the posts around "The Purple Rose of Cairo".

Ahhhhh! Bullets Over Broadway!

Edited by Baal_T'shuvah

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Andrew wrote:

: And Peter, I'm no haiku expert either, but from my limited reading, the 'English rules' are more flexible than 5-7-5, as the original rules are kind of untranslateable from the Japanese. And thus endeth my poetry knowledge. So I figured I'd just have fun and follow the more flexible guidelines.

No worries. I am chastened as it is by my discoveries at the Wikipedia entry on "haiku". Not for the first time, an A&F thread has been an educational experience for me. :)

Baal_T'shuvah wrote:

: Ahhhhh! Bullets Over Broadway!

Oh, right, I could see that. I'm just not used to hearing "white way" on its own; usually it's "the Great White Way", no?

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Yes, but I traded the "Great" for a "but", which I wrote before I read Andrew and your comments on the haiku syllabilic flexibility.

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[tangent] Peter, until you mentioned it and prompted me to do a little more digging, I had forgotten about the syllabic flexibility. I'm glad you nudged me. I should've remembered, based on what I knew about the multitude of translations for perhaps the best-known haiku, by Basho (IIRC, widely regarded as the greatest haiku poet):

an ancient pond

a frog jumps in

the splash of water

OR

old pond . . .

a frog leaps in

water’s sound

OR (my favorite)

The old pond,

A frog jumps in:

Plop!

OR

There once was a curious frog

Who sat by a pond on a log

And, to see what resulted,

In the pond catapulted

With a water-noise heard round the bog.

[/tangent]

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May be too vague, but here's a quick one...

A garden party,

Where strange seeds are planted deep,

Is not what it seems.

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Ah, I so love my wife. Here's her contribution:

The Dude's head submerged

Urination on the rug

Violence in league play

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